May 01, 2007

Untrustworthy


Who do I trust
and who do I not?

This life is a mystery,
a puzzle, a con!

A big drama to save-face
A big dream of love and grace
Reality strikes and deals hard
a slap across your face

Olden goodness, old-world charm
Now exists grudge, revenge and harm!

Innocence gives room for the cheats
to leave you stranded on the streets
No one to trust, no place to run
The game of deception has just begun!

Further down- more filthy souls
Makes you shirk away from the potholes!

A confession of Confusion
An unconquerable desolation!

Life moves on with more tears to follow
Today I wait- scared- for the morrow!

3 comments

Mark IV said...

and i honestly hope the morrow has lesser of the taunts and cheats... an amazing play of words.. kudos:-)

Kush said...

OK Sandhya... I do know that you would already know what I wish to say nevertheless, being a friend, I'd like to express it in mah own words and criticize...

The rhyme does read cliched. I'd rather you concentrated more on ideas and emotions than on words. All in all a good poem, however. Still, you can do much better.

Regards,
Ceruleus

Baiyu said...

A good Expression Of Thoughts. Well Written.But Having Said That,Somewhere Down The Line Your Poem Leaves A Taste Of Pessimism In Life.I Don't Think It Is So.
Best Wishes BAIYU

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